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good job overall. i think:
"Cradled by twelve empty sell the heart containers" = "Cradled by twelve empty Zelda heart containers"
"With his sore furry wrist severed" = "With his four furry wrists severed"
"I duel, too, but only to exploit no brainers" = "I'd do it too, but only to explain(exploit? not sure.) no-brainers" referring to the previous line
there's a few other minor things but i lost track of them for now.
good job overall. i think:
"Cradled by twelve empty sell the heart containers" = "Cradled by twelve empty Zelda heart containers"
"With his sore furry wrist severed" = "With his four furry wrists severed"
"I duel, too, but only to exploit no brainers" = "I'd do it too, but only to explain(exploit? not sure.) no-brainers" referring to the previous line
there's a few other minor things but i lost track of them for now.