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This one is good also. The only part I wasnt feeling was this part:
Don't misunderstand I want to be your man You are just so fine. But soon we'll run out of time.
That part could use some good revision in my opinion. Try to make everything as good as this part:
You wouldn't lie to me. I won't to you and that's a start. I think I've got the key To unlock your broken heart.
I know im coming off kind of assholish, but thats ok. Im just trying to give you some honest feedback.
This one is good also. The only part I wasnt feeling was this part:
Don't misunderstand I want to be your man You are just so fine. But soon we'll run out of time.
That part could use some good revision in my opinion. Try to make everything as good as this part:
You wouldn't lie to me. I won't to you and that's a start. I think I've got the key To unlock your broken heart.
I know im coming off kind of assholish, but thats ok. Im just trying to give you some honest feedback.