I'm learning to play this on the ukulele, and I've listened to it probably 100 times in the process. There's one word that should be added that would tie the first verse together better - it should be "We" not "I" got gym class in half an hour... Otherwise the Keds and tube socks line floats by itself - does she wear those all the time? No - it's just for gym class, and that's where he admires her. 'We' would hang the question: Are they together? No, she doesn't know who he his - dramatic tension. As-is it sounds like 2 throwaway lines. Who cares that he has gym class? And why does she dress funny?
I'm learning to play this on the ukulele, and I've listened to it probably 100 times in the process. There's one word that should be added that would tie the first verse together better - it should be "We" not "I" got gym class in half an hour... Otherwise the Keds and tube socks line floats by itself - does she wear those all the time? No - it's just for gym class, and that's where he admires her. 'We' would hang the question: Are they together? No, she doesn't know who he his - dramatic tension. As-is it sounds like 2 throwaway lines. Who cares that he has gym class? And why does she dress funny?