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I'm fairly certain "The thin of his tie..." sounds more like "Tighten his tie, when he slips in his suit, a lift of the cuff, and the shine of his shoes"
I'm fairly certain "The thin of his tie..." sounds more like "Tighten his tie, when he slips in his suit, a lift of the cuff, and the shine of his shoes"