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(Face in the mirror on my bathroom door I saw her dance in rain in the summer downpour)
should actually be
(When I glanced in the mirror on my bathroom door I saw her dance in the rain in the summer downpour)
(Face in the mirror on my bathroom door I saw her dance in rain in the summer downpour)
should actually be
(When I glanced in the mirror on my bathroom door I saw her dance in the rain in the summer downpour)