Lines I think could corrected, but only if you agree:
"so I smiled" could be "so I spat"
"whoa is me" should be "woe is me"
"time for regret" should be "room for regret"
"live for nothing" should be "regret nothing"
"last ten years are not ???" should be "last ten years on auto-pilot"
"so unlikely like a cop that can quickly be replaced" should be "so wear it lightly like a cap that can quickly be replaced"
"before I came back" should be "before I gave in" or "caved in"
Not positive on this one, but I feel like "thinks his time is" could be "thinks it's timeless"
fixed, thanks for the feedback
Lines I think could corrected, but only if you agree:
"so I smiled" could be "so I spat"
"whoa is me" should be "woe is me"
"time for regret" should be "room for regret"
"live for nothing" should be "regret nothing"
"last ten years are not ???" should be "last ten years on auto-pilot"
"so unlikely like a cop that can quickly be replaced" should be "so wear it lightly like a cap that can quickly be replaced"
"before I came back" should be "before I gave in" or "caved in"
Not positive on this one, but I feel like "thinks his time is" could be "thinks it's timeless"
fixed, thanks for the feedback
fixed, thanks for the feedback