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Looks good, but I think "My soul was dry at first year" should be "My soul was dry and thirsty" And "Each day was like a melody" doesn't sound right. I'm not sure exactly what he says but it sound to me like "The taste was like a melody"
Looks good, but I think "My soul was dry at first year" should be "My soul was dry and thirsty" And "Each day was like a melody" doesn't sound right. I'm not sure exactly what he says but it sound to me like "The taste was like a melody"