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I believe two lines are wrong: "features faded and baited in estimation" should be "faded and dated"
"a louf intinged with truth as the best lies are" should be "aloof and tinged"
I mean no offense.
The third line should be "wrists and ankles crossed at a vulnerable angle."
The second line in the last verse should be "left hand gripping hockey stick or cattle prod."
I also agree with the corrections that the person above me posted
thanks. fixed.
I believe two lines are wrong: "features faded and baited in estimation" should be "faded and dated"
"a louf intinged with truth as the best lies are" should be "aloof and tinged"
I mean no offense.
The third line should be "wrists and ankles crossed at a vulnerable angle."
The third line should be "wrists and ankles crossed at a vulnerable angle."
The second line in the last verse should be "left hand gripping hockey stick or cattle prod."
The second line in the last verse should be "left hand gripping hockey stick or cattle prod."
I also agree with the corrections that the person above me posted
I also agree with the corrections that the person above me posted
thanks. fixed.
thanks. fixed.