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I think:
"A quiet seems with their eyes sewn shut" should be "A choir sings with their eyes sewn shut"
& "The pastor stands on his bull-pit while preachin' to hell," should be "The pastor stands on his pulpit"
I think:
"A quiet seems with their eyes sewn shut" should be "A choir sings with their eyes sewn shut"
& "The pastor stands on his bull-pit while preachin' to hell," should be "The pastor stands on his pulpit"