I agree with most of those corrections, but I actually think that the original writer was right about the "ah, go f--- his brains out..." line, because when he's rapping he seems to switch his voice on that line as if it's the mother's response to the step dad's previous line ("I'll go handle this, of course, unless you object?" He's inviting the mother's response, and the next line is that response). Moreover, when he's imitating the step-dad's dialogue, he uses a lower kind of voice, which is in contrast to the high, nasally kind of voice Eminem uses when...
I agree with most of those corrections, but I actually think that the original writer was right about the "ah, go f--- his brains out..." line, because when he's rapping he seems to switch his voice on that line as if it's the mother's response to the step dad's previous line ("I'll go handle this, of course, unless you object?" He's inviting the mother's response, and the next line is that response). Moreover, when he's imitating the step-dad's dialogue, he uses a lower kind of voice, which is in contrast to the high, nasally kind of voice Eminem uses when he's rapping in in the mother's dialogue, which I feel he's clearly using over the line in question.
It's a pretty good way to end the verse, at that, revealing that the mother's not oblivious to the molestation, she knows exactly what's going on and doesn't care.
Pretty good, although theres a few mistakes.
"Jeffrey don't let that fucker get you upset"
should be
"Debbie (as in Eminems mother) don't let that fucker get you upset"
also,
"Ah, go fuck his brains out if any is left in his head "
Should be
"I'll go fuck his brains out if any is left in his head" as its his step-dad saying this line
Finally,
"Well this is called Ass-Rape and we should do the Jail scene "
Should be
"Well this is called Ass-Rape and we're shooting the Jail scene"
Other than that good job man
I agree with most of those corrections, but I actually think that the original writer was right about the "ah, go f--- his brains out..." line, because when he's rapping he seems to switch his voice on that line as if it's the mother's response to the step dad's previous line ("I'll go handle this, of course, unless you object?" He's inviting the mother's response, and the next line is that response). Moreover, when he's imitating the step-dad's dialogue, he uses a lower kind of voice, which is in contrast to the high, nasally kind of voice Eminem uses when...
I agree with most of those corrections, but I actually think that the original writer was right about the "ah, go f--- his brains out..." line, because when he's rapping he seems to switch his voice on that line as if it's the mother's response to the step dad's previous line ("I'll go handle this, of course, unless you object?" He's inviting the mother's response, and the next line is that response). Moreover, when he's imitating the step-dad's dialogue, he uses a lower kind of voice, which is in contrast to the high, nasally kind of voice Eminem uses when he's rapping in in the mother's dialogue, which I feel he's clearly using over the line in question.
It's a pretty good way to end the verse, at that, revealing that the mother's not oblivious to the molestation, she knows exactly what's going on and doesn't care.