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Where it says "her eyes were icy blue as he fell to the ground" it should be "as he fell to the ground her eyes were icy blue". Other then that nice job. one of my favorate bands
Where it says "her eyes were icy blue as he fell to the ground" it should be "as he fell to the ground her eyes were icy blue". Other then that nice job. one of my favorate bands