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A few corrections to make
"'twas on her dark march she pinned south bound I did ride"
Should read: "'Twas on a dark March evening, southbound I did ride."
"you know that you've been to real to those whom realness should be vague."
Should read: "You know that you've been real to those whom realness should be paid."
"as captives of this paltry train,"
Should read: "as captives of this paltry trade"
This is just amazing. Truly poetic, abrasively harsh; a masterpiece of writing and composition. Nobody, but nobody, writes songs like this.
A few corrections to make
"'twas on her dark march she pinned south bound I did ride"
Should read: "'Twas on a dark March evening, southbound I did ride."
"you know that you've been to real to those whom realness should be vague."
Should read: "You know that you've been real to those whom realness should be paid."
"as captives of this paltry train,"
Should read: "as captives of this paltry trade"
This is just amazing. Truly poetic, abrasively harsh; a masterpiece of writing and composition. Nobody, but nobody, writes songs like this.