I was hesitant with the ghosts line because I had hoped it would shed a little more light on "so fragile, so thin / just like my own." I suppose he's referring to "horizon's hands" being just like his...but how is the horizon "fragile" and "thin"?
The "have land" line makes sense, thanks. It sounds like he's saying "oh" here, which doesn't match with the parallel line that later uses "though," but they're both essentially there just for meter, so I didn't think it was that important.
To be honest, the "name" line sounds like "Came an A manatee," but that makes zero sense. I just can't think of a verb that sounds like "tea" and doesn't end in s that would fit.
The "life to be" line sounds like "How dull with-a my life to be," which doesn't make sense. "How always" makes more sense, but I definitely hear a "d" sound somewhere in there.
That last line sounds spot on, thanks. I'm not sure how to punctuate it, though. Does "lost and found" modify "boy"? "Time"?
I was hesitant with the ghosts line because I had hoped it would shed a little more light on "so fragile, so thin / just like my own." I suppose he's referring to "horizon's hands" being just like his...but how is the horizon "fragile" and "thin"?
The "have land" line makes sense, thanks. It sounds like he's saying "oh" here, which doesn't match with the parallel line that later uses "though," but they're both essentially there just for meter, so I didn't think it was that important.
To be honest, the "name" line sounds like "Came an A manatee," but that makes zero sense. I just can't think of a verb that sounds like "tea" and doesn't end in s that would fit.
The "life to be" line sounds like "How dull with-a my life to be," which doesn't make sense. "How always" makes more sense, but I definitely hear a "d" sound somewhere in there.
That last line sounds spot on, thanks. I'm not sure how to punctuate it, though. Does "lost and found" modify "boy"? "Time"?