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I love how he keeps failing at his haikus. Haikus should follow a 5/7/5 pattern. Look at the verses. The first one should be written like:
I / have / been / try/ing To / write / a / hai/ku / for / you Some / things / I / just / can't / DO
See the word "do"? It's a sixth syllable! And he can't get it right until he does the nonsense verse. That's so cool.
you're absolutely right!
my favorite part is
"I've never thought much of formulaic verse anyway and rhymes are not my fort-" <forte=strength, something someone is good at :) clever!
However, note to the editor Mr. BlackSPY407
the song might make more sense if it were typed using the haiku formula
for instance
5 La / da / dee / did/dum 7 La / da / dad/dum / doo / did/dle 5 Dum / doo / la / dee/dle
Please, do the song some justice! :)
I love how he keeps failing at his haikus. Haikus should follow a 5/7/5 pattern. Look at the verses. The first one should be written like:
I / have / been / try/ing To / write / a / hai/ku / for / you Some / things / I / just / can't / DO
See the word "do"? It's a sixth syllable! And he can't get it right until he does the nonsense verse. That's so cool.
you're absolutely right!
you're absolutely right!
my favorite part is
my favorite part is
"I've never thought much of formulaic verse anyway and rhymes are not my fort-" <forte=strength, something someone is good at :) clever!
"I've never thought much of formulaic verse anyway and rhymes are not my fort-" <forte=strength, something someone is good at :) clever!
However, note to the editor Mr. BlackSPY407
However, note to the editor Mr. BlackSPY407
the song might make more sense if it were typed using the haiku formula
the song might make more sense if it were typed using the haiku formula
for instance
for instance
5 La / da / dee / did/dum 7 La / da / dad/dum / doo / did/dle 5 Dum / doo / la / dee/dle
5 La / da / dee / did/dum 7 La / da / dad/dum / doo / did/dle 5 Dum / doo / la / dee/dle
Please, do the song some justice! :)
Please, do the song some justice! :)