It doesn't sound nearly as meaningful as some of your other stuff. It almost sounds like you're struggling too much for a rhyme. I do realize it's not done, but I think you should write it from the heart instead of trying to rhyme, and it'll be all the much better.
It doesn't sound nearly as meaningful as some of your other stuff. It almost sounds like you're struggling too much for a rhyme. I do realize it's not done, but I think you should write it from the heart instead of trying to rhyme, and it'll be all the much better.
The other songs are awesome, by the way.