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| Shane Hebert – Getting Nowhere Lyrics
| 21 years ago
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I like how the person seems confused, but somehow comforted in the end, even in his confusion. I'm a sucker for a good last line, and I love yours. Absolutely love. "I know I'll see you again
Just in someone else" |
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| Shane Hebert – Down Here Lyrics
| 21 years ago
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*shudders* Rhyming, although good when sung, bothers me to read. I'm afraid I'll have to leave this one to be interpreted by someone else. Rhyming always comes off as so forced... |
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| Shane Hebert – Come and Go Lyrics
| 21 years ago
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I think I like this one alot more than the first. I have nothing critical to add. ^_^ and thats always a good sign. I love the lines "Never seen headlights so bright, Between dawn and nightfall." You have a knack for imagry. |
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| Shane Hebert – Before Too Long Lyrics
| 21 years ago
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I'm not sure if you wanted me to be critical, or simply tell you it's well written. So, I'll do the first of the two. For one, it's short. But I really like the imagry. The third stanza though, last line, I'm not sure how it fits in with the warmth and such. Aswell, reusing the word lie (lies) in one stanza with two differnet meanings could be a bad idea. Basicly, I'm trying to say this could make a good song but I have doubt about how the line "well I live a lie" will flow. I could always be proven wrong and when sung it could fit perfectly... Just trying to help. |
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